Jherean's creative writing

Last week one of our distance learning tasks was to write a story on what life might be like for an animal at a zoo while they are closed for lockdown. This is the story Jherean wrote. As you can see this is not a short story. Jherean has taken his time to carefully think about the problem and solution in his story. He has used a clear beginning, middle and end. Well done Jherean, I hope you enjoy his story as much as I did

Hi guys so today's blog is my another writing which one of my task to do at home that the teacher set us to do.

 So I have to make a story of a day in a life in a zoo. 

Here are some things that we have to include and to add in our story. 

Don’t forget to include…

• A beginning, middle and end
• Detail so that your reader gets a picture in your head.
• Give your characters names and make sure we know what type of animals they are.
• Be creative and have fun with your writing

In the middle of my story, I putted a problem and I also put a solving problem part. Here is my writing that I've done!

Beginning:

The sun was so  bright as the animals woke up and suddenly roared. It's time for their breakfast.
They went and ate food. They were eating quietly, until two panda fought because of food. The Giant
  panda’s were fighting together with other animals. They were so loud, suddenly a cute roared heard
across the zoo. Everyone stopped and got shocked, they turned to look at who roared so loud and
cutely at the same time that nobody heard before. They suddenly saw a cute little newborn lion.
“Awwwww!!!” They all said.

Middle: Problem

The other animals were shocked that the cute lion was born. They seemed to notice that there was no
one with the little lion, they were confused. As soon as they realised that the little lion was sad, they
immediately knew what happened. The big lion roared as big as she could to get the attention of the
zookeeper. The zookeeper went and was a bit confused about why she roared. 

The animals don’t know how to express to the zookeeper that they need something, how? 

The zookeeper doesn’t know what she was talking about so he just went out and continued doing his
work. The big lion went and asked the giraffe for help. The giraffe carried the lion out of the fences as
the lion runned and followed the zookeeper. The zookeeper doesn’t seem to notice it.

Middle: Problem Solving

As the big lion keeps on following him, when he gets there, it leads to a place where there are a bunch of
lions and animals. It says….. FOR SALE???? And the lions were tied up? The big lion was quite
confused why, and suddenly, she finally gets what it means. The zookeeper was about to open the door
to get a lion because someone  was buying it. As he grabs one lion and about to close the door, the big
lion suddenly jumps in and bit the zookeepers. He seemed injured, she looked at the pity eyes of the
lions. She tried to untie them and she successfully did. The faces of the animals lit up as they thought
there was no chance of them getting away from the situation. 

The mother of the little lion runned to where she left the baby. She kept on running until she found her
baby. She was happy, she immediately hugged her and smiled at her cuteness. Everyone gathered
up and showed a smile to the big lion as a thank you for her help, without her the lions could be apart
together with their families. They call the big lion a “Super Lion”. 

Ending: 

As the day continued, it was night, the zookeepers seemed to pity them and kind of regretting what
he had done. But at least, he won’t do that again, he promised himself. It was night, as they all slept
happily.. And they continue living with problems, with love and with care for each other. 

I hope you enjoy my story and please give me a positive, helpful and thoughtful feedback. Bye!